User blog comment:PerniciousFabrication/The 249th Hunger Games/@comment-26904653-20160629053124/@comment-24561298-20160629141040

Well, in my opinion, it was better than the proginal, and not because it was Cauter's. Funnily enough, I felt this reaping slightly longer then the last and I was about to tell you that rhe le gth was great. It is probably because of the slower pace in this one. I believe that the trick for this to feel appropiate is toying wih the length and the pace until you feel satisfied. For the pace, it was slightly slow for my taste, but not nearly enough to get boring. However, Cauter does have his times of BEING slow paced, so for that part I think it was appropriate. Format I feel like it is perfect, I would just stand out the subtitles a little more.

For Cauter's representation, I found it spot-on. I liked how you highlighted his quirks, his obnoxious and disciplined habits, but also his bad, anxious and subconscious habits. I really feel like you nailed it. Personally, I would use just a tad more ornate in his writing and possibly a bit of his puns and quick remarks. Other than that, you did great. Good job. :)